Poem: A goblin stood there, handsome bloke. The dials spun backward through the day. He sighed, “You still ain’t got the joke.” “I’ve told you this in every way.”
Aye, this is a pantoum. As I’m sure you’ve surmised, the pattern works by repeating the 2nd and 4th lines of each stanza as the 1st and 3rd lines of the next stanza.
The final stanza then draws on both the preceding stanza and the opening one, using the 2nd and 4th lines of the previous stanza alongside the 1st and 3rd lines from the opening stanza. In my case, I reversed those final borrowed lines to create a looping effect, bringing the poem back to where it began. ✨🦋
OK then - that was a bit of jump down the rabbit hole - such a cool idea for a prompt and so very well executed!!!! I am going to have to come back to this a couple more times because I still don’t think I fully have it but I am having fun figuring it out!!! Well done!!
What is this witchcraft? I thought your poems where fun because they tell stories, this is next level story telling. You told a story about a time loop and wrote a poem that is a time loop.
LOL, Thank ye kindly Memphis, I'm so glad you are enjoying the poems, didn't you mention earlier in the month that you're not a fan of poetry. Have I corrupted ye?
Wonderfully done. Something like that takes a lot more skill than what I possess. When I see writing like this, it makes me realise how far I have to go. An inspirational piece.
glad it was inspiring and not discouraging, these are a bit of a pain but you have the skill for this, two lines are written for the next stanza as you go so you are really just fitting a rhyming pair in-between an already written rhyming pair. i had to massage a few so they fit and even with that i have a few stanzas where the pipes become personified. 😂 ✨🦋
This is really good. I love the poem just as a poem but the pattern of repeating lines is brilliantly done.
Does this type of poem have a ‘formal’ name?
Aye, this is a pantoum. As I’m sure you’ve surmised, the pattern works by repeating the 2nd and 4th lines of each stanza as the 1st and 3rd lines of the next stanza.
The final stanza then draws on both the preceding stanza and the opening one, using the 2nd and 4th lines of the previous stanza alongside the 1st and 3rd lines from the opening stanza. In my case, I reversed those final borrowed lines to create a looping effect, bringing the poem back to where it began. ✨🦋
Amazing work.
It must be a true brain frying puzzler until you get used them!
Thanks for telling me all about Pantoums 🙏
(One day, I might give it a go 🤔)
I doff my cap to you, remarkable. I will revisit in the morning. 🙏
Awe, thank ye kindly Mark. I hope it is fun in the morning as well. ✨🦋
Wow! That's such a complex piece! I tip my hat to you! 🎩
Thank ye Kindly. It was a challenge to be sure.✨🦋
I only can imagine.. I feel like my brain would melt into a pile of mush trying to figure out how to write something like that...
LOL it’s not all that bad, though I did have to make lots of notes to keep everything square. ✨🦋
A marvelously serpentine piece, doubling back on itself like a mountainous road up a very steep peak. A pantoum, you say?
I do love it!
I just did a shorter one of these this month for my fairy tale in notes✨🦋
Your little goblin better check his clock, it might be running 🏃♂️ a little backwards
aye, some of the gears are slipping.
Good writing ✍
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OK then - that was a bit of jump down the rabbit hole - such a cool idea for a prompt and so very well executed!!!! I am going to have to come back to this a couple more times because I still don’t think I fully have it but I am having fun figuring it out!!! Well done!!
Thank ye kindly, i'm so glad you enjoyed it.
What is this witchcraft? I thought your poems where fun because they tell stories, this is next level story telling. You told a story about a time loop and wrote a poem that is a time loop.
LOL, Thank ye kindly Memphis, I'm so glad you are enjoying the poems, didn't you mention earlier in the month that you're not a fan of poetry. Have I corrupted ye?
my memory is unclear on this matter I plead the 5th.
What a refreshing poem!
Thank ye kindly, im so glad you enjoyed it, I appreciate your commitment. ✨🦋
Delightful
awe, thank ye kindly, i appreciate your comment I'm so glad you enjoyed it.😁✨🦋
Wonderfully done. Something like that takes a lot more skill than what I possess. When I see writing like this, it makes me realise how far I have to go. An inspirational piece.
glad it was inspiring and not discouraging, these are a bit of a pain but you have the skill for this, two lines are written for the next stanza as you go so you are really just fitting a rhyming pair in-between an already written rhyming pair. i had to massage a few so they fit and even with that i have a few stanzas where the pipes become personified. 😂 ✨🦋
Ooooh very nice! Delightfully non-linear for sure ☺️
Poetry can be so versatile
I'm writing that down ✍️
lovely poetry and a noble cause, You may also be interested in what we're doing over at Indie Ink Fund. ✨🦋
aye, it has a looping time slippage. ✨🦋
Sinus congestion has my brain not working, time moving backwards?
Aye, time repeating